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+++ b/updates/019_2019jul16_purism_donation.mdwn
@@ -5,10 +5,10 @@ We are delighted to be able to announce additional sponsorship by
 
 As a social purpose corporation, Purism is empowered to balance
 ethics, social enterprise, and profitable business. I am delighted that
-they chose to fund the Libre RISC-V hybrid CPU/GPU through the NLNet
-Foundation. Their donation provides us some extra flexibility in how
-we reach the goal of bringing to market a hybrid CPU, VPU, and GPU that
-is libre to the bedrock.
+they chose to fund the Libre RISC-V hybrid CPU/GPU through the
+[NLNet Foundation](https://nlnet.nl/PET). Their donation provides us some
+extra flexibility in how we reach the goal of bringing to market a hybrid
+CPU, VPU, and GPU that is libre to the bedrock.
 
 Purism started with a [Crowd Supply
 campaign](https://www.crowdsupply.com/purism/librem-15) to deliver a
@@ -27,9 +27,9 @@ Purism then moved quickly to provide a BIOS update to disable this
 "feature," eliminating the last and most important barrier to being
 able to declare a full privacy software stack.
 
-It are these kinds of brave strategic decisions to kick the trend
-towards privacy-invading hardware "by default" for which Purism
-deserves our respect and gratitude.
+Purism deserves our respect and gratitude for this type of brave and
+strategic decision-making to kick the trend towards privacy-invading
+hardware "by default."
 
 However, just as NLNet recognises, Purism also appreciates that we
 cannot stop at just the software.  Profit-maximising corporations just
@@ -60,7 +60,7 @@ where to begin.
   begun, with ALU register hazards and shadowing already completed, and 
   memory hazards underway.
 
-# Multi-issue
+### Multi-issue
 
 Multi-issue is absolutely critical for this CPU/VPU/GPU because the
 [SimpleV](https://libre-riscv.org/simple_v_extension/specification)